by Tish Kirkland (www.yes-ielts.com)
This article describes my step-by-step approach to writing an essay for IELTS Writing Task 2. The topic is from Test 1 of Cambridge IELTS Book 8.
Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Step 1
First I carefully read the question and underline the key words.
Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.Then I think about what the question is actually asking. I create a yes-no question so that I can answer it easily. This method works for me.
Should parents teach their children how to be good
members of society ?
I make two columns, one for yes and the other for no, and brainstorm my ideas. I make a note of all the ideas I have which could support answers to the yes-no question.
| 
YES / AGREE | 
NO / DISAGREE | 
| 
(parents
  should) 
first
  educators 
have
  the most influence 
ultimate
  role models 
chn
  learn through imitation 
tchrs
  have enough responsibilities 
tchrs/school
  may have different values | 
(the
  school should) 
parents
  are too busy 
parents
  have no time 
chn
  are at school every day 
school
  = place to learn | 
You can see that some of my ideas are repetitive (parents are too busy is pretty much the same as parents have no time), but at this brainstorming stage this repetitions is OK. I will edit my ideas more when it comes to the next step: planning.
When brainstorming, I also think about some of the words I would like to include in my essay. In this one I think I would like to use the following words (in one form or another): provide, educate, responsibility, imitate, microcosm, influence, values, social, raise, rear. In addition, I decide that I would like to use the following collocations and idioms: role model, first educator, step up, (put responsibility) on the shoulders of, follow suit, bring up. By making a note of these words now, I can come back to them when I am planning, writing, or even when I am checking my work.
Step 3
Next, I sort my ideas into a plan:
| 
PLAN | ||
| 
INTRODUCTION | 
child rearing =
  big responsibility | |
| 
BODY | 
PARAGRAPH 1 
(MAIN
  IDEA 1 + 
Support
  this with Explanation / Evidence / Examples) | 
yes, parents should. why?  
main role model 
chn learn
  through imitation 
values are the
  same | 
| 
PARAGRAPH 2 
(MAIN
  IDEA 2 + Support this with Explanation / Evidence / Examples) | 
yes,
  parents should. why? 
schools should
  focus on academic 
schools &
  teachers = too busy | |
| 
PARAGRAPH 3 
(BALANCE
  / ACKNOWLEDGE,  
&
  REFUTE)  | 
no, schools should. why? 
chn at school
  daily. 
parents too
  busy 
BUT…      chn also at
  home daily 
parents need to
  step up | |
| 
CONCLUSION | 
parents, w/ support from school. | |
My plan would be in more note form than above, but in this case I want you to be able to read and understand it. You can see that Body Paragraph 1 is about the role of the home, whereas Body Paragraph 2 is about the role of the school. Both paragraphs main ideas are in agreement that parents should take responsibility.
Body Paragraph 3 mentions the opposing idea, that schools should take responsibility. However, this idea is then refuted, taking the reader back to my opinion that it is the parents’ responsibility.
After analysing the question, brainstorming, and planning, it’s now time to write. Here is my essay as I first wrote it:
There is no argument that raising children into model
citizens takes a lot of effort. Yet time and time again this responsibility is
unfairly placed on the shoulders of educational institutions, when in fact it
should be the parents who take charge of such a fundamental issue.
Because they are the child’s first contact, parents
must take responsibility for their children’s education regarding social
values. It is the parents whom the child ultimately looks to for guidance and
support, therefore parents should model good behaviour for the child to copy.
Children learn through imitation, and if parents can demonstrate positive
actions, their children will follow suit.
The school is certainly a place where children come
into contact with their peers, and thus can be seen as a microcosm of adult
society. At school, children can practice their interactive and social skills
which they have learnt from their parents at home. They will be challenged with
different ways of thinking and a sound base provided at home can help children
develop their own world view, and to realise how they fit into society.
It may be argued parents are too busy working to
provide their children with socialisation skills. They have to work long hours
in order to support their families and afford things like school fees. In
addition, the children spend a large proportion of their waking hours at
school, which makes school the ideal place for learning all types of skills.
However, it must be acknowledged that although children spend a lot of time at
school, in the end it is home which has the most influence. 
In conclusion, parents’ actions are much more
influential on the child than the school’s.  They should demonstrate their own positive social skills for
their children to copy, long before their children even start school. Later on,
schools can support the parents’ teachings by providing opportunities for
children to interact with their peers under the teacher’s guidance, but
essentially this social education starts at home.
Step 5
Now I check my essay and make some minor adjustments. Here is the finished result:
There is no argument that raising children into model
citizens takes a lot of effort. Yet time and time again this responsibility is
unfairly placed on the shoulders of educational institutions, when in fact it
should be the parents who take charge of such a fundamental concern.
Because they are the child’s first contact, parents
must take responsibility for their children’s education regarding social
values. It is the parents whom the child ultimately looks to for guidance and
support, therefore parents should model good behaviour for the child to copy.
Children learn through imitation, and if parents can demonstrate positive
actions, their children will follow suit.
The school is certainly a place where children come
into contact with their peers, and thus can be seen as a microcosm of adult
society. At school, children can practice their interactive and social skills
learnt from their parents at home. They will be challenged with different ways
of thinking and a solid foundation provided at home can help children develop
their own world view, and to realise how they fit into society.
It may be argued parents are too busy working to
provide their children with socialisation skills. They have to work long hours
in order to support their families and afford things like school fees. In
addition, the children spend a large proportion of their waking hours at
school, which makes school the ideal place for learning all types of skills.
However, it must be acknowledged that although children spend a lot of time at
school, in the end it is home which has the most influence. 
In conclusion, parents’ actions are much more
influential on the child than the school’s.  They should demonstrate their own positive social skills for
their children to copy, long before their children even start school. Later on,
schools can support the parents’ teachings by providing opportunities for
children to interact with their peers under the teacher’s guidance, but
essentially this social education starts at home.
While checking this essay, I made sure all my apostrophes are in the right place and my plurals are accurate. I am particularly concerned about making sure parents, parents’, parent’s, children’s, and child’s are all correct. I checked that my pronouns are not too repetitive and that it is clear who they refer to. I changed issue to concern in the Introduction. In Body Paragraph 2, I removed which they have learnt and changed sound base to solid foundation.
For more information about writing for Task 2 in IELTS, please take a look at my e-courses on www.yes-ielts.com.
- Tish
 
IELTS is not easy. Only students comprehension and analytical skills are important. Constant practice and confidence are needed for the IELTS.
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